Turnstiles aren't theater and Redis doesn't make password storage secure so the entire thing seems a little el-el-emish..

But what about that sentence does that not make sense? They are describing tailgating..

The last two paragraphs are mainly what stood out. I've spent hours trying to get LLMs to stop writing like that. It's hard because you can't just say things like "don't write lists of three items" because sometimes you want a list of three items. The rest of the text could be written by a person as it's kind of disjointed, but that could also be the result of trying to prompt out the AI-isms.