no, it's one of most well written PIR's I've seen. It establishes terms and procedures after communicating that this isn't an RCA, then they detail the timeline of tests and deployments done and what went wrong. They were not excessively verbose or terse. This is the right way of communicating to the intended audience. It is both technical people, executives and law makers alike that will be reading this. They communicated their findings clearly without code, screenshots, excessive historical details and other distractions.