Yeah, that seems good, but I'm suggesting the plan for "some other form of liquidity" be a little more explicitly stated. I know this isn't what plays well with the HN crowd, but there are other paths to success besides the explosive exit, and one of those is spending a long time building a good solid business, which can take more than 10 years.
If there's a good path to the employee owning their shares (or some fraction thereof) outright, that is more desirable in some ways than an outstanding option agreement with a ticking clock.